Winning THRILLER Feature Screenplay – NEMESIS, by Carl Joglar

Winning Screenplay – NEMESIS
Written by Carl Joglar

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
STROUD – Cassandra Guthrie
BURNHAM – Dan Cristofori
MONTERO – Jane Hailes

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

A car wreck allows a fugitive recovery agent’s prisoner to escape into the woods where she’s forced to pursue the killer, but when the other driver finds her in the wilderness, the hunt becomes complicated and the agent begins to suspect the woman’s involvement was not by chance.

 Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

NEMESIS is about a fugitive recovery agent who, after being disgraced and fired from the U.S. Marshals, attempts to cover legal fees in a custody battle for her son by cashing in on the capture of an elusive killer. Unfortunately, she gets into a car wreck, her prisoner escapes into a vast wilderness and she’s forced to hunt him down again. But (without giving too much away), when the driver of the other vehicle finds her in the woods, the situation becomes increasingly complicated because of some hidden agendas.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

I’d say it could fall under drama, thriller and action because there are elements of all three, but if I had to categorize it, I would call it a dramatic thriller.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Just thinking about this, it occurs to me that no answer could sound very humble. I do feel very strongly about its merits, but even moreso after I started receiving so much positive feedback. People would say, “Wow, this is insane”, which I take as a compliment because you want to shake people up. I think the fact that three characters that are so different from each other are basically trapped in this environment together makes for a really curious situation. I feel like people might say, “I’ve got to see what happens when you put THESE three together.” But more than that, the main character’s journey is heart-breaking and relatable. I tried to make the ultimate example out of her. The moral of the story is “Don’t let your situation change who you are”. And who hasn’t been tempted at least once to step over that line?

How would you describe this script in two words?

“Intense” and “fast-paced”. As a writer, I have an unhealthy yet productive fear of being boring, so in a story, I’m obsessed with something either always happening or about to happen.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Jaws. It’s so amazing on so many levels. Story, acting, editing, etc. But Neil Simon’s The Goodbye Girl is a close second. That main character is the most charmingly hilarious train wreck I’ve ever seen. Great stuff.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve worked longer on this script than I have on my marriage. I’m kidding. I actually wrote the first draft in less than a month, but of course, I’ve been making changes ever since, so it’s going on six months now and one draft kind of melds into the next, so who knows how many.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been doing this since 1996 so I’ve lost count. If I included short scripts and commissioned scripts, the number would be ridiculous, but as far as strictly original speculative full-length screenplays.. probably 24 that I can remember. Oh! And a book. I wrote a contemporary sci-fi YA novel called THE PERILS OF QUAD. Right now I’m trying to find a home for it at a traditional publishing house.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Wow, that’s tough. I don’t know if this is good or bad, but ever since I was little, there’s been something about Earth, Wind and Fire’s “Fantasy”. I love it to this day and I really have no clue why. Maybe it was playing in the background the first time a girl kissed me or something. ..Right now, though, I’m addicted to Disturbed’s cover of Simon & Garfunkel’s The Sound of Silence.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Writers are going to hate me for this: There were no obstacles. There never are. I’ve never had writer’s block. If I did, I never realized it. I mean, I always get nervous when I start but once I’m off and running, that’s it. The pages start to pile up. Obviously, they don’t come out perfectly but they always come out.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My wife and child, of course. They’re my world. But the weird answer to that would be Vintage Marvel comic books. I’m not a collector, by any means. I just love the look, the feel, the simplicity, even the smell of a dog-eared silver age Marvel Comic. I guess because it brings me back to the days when my biggest problem in the world was deciding between Apple Jacks and Fruit Loops. Man, if life could always be like that. Good times.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I have to credit my best friend and producer, Alex Torres for that. He found out about the festival and immediately entered the screenplay. He’s the best. When I first read the feedback I received, I was pleasantly shocked because it was immediately apparent that this was a festival run by experienced and competent professionals and they clearly took the proper time to analyze the material. As a writer, you really deeply appreciate when people like this give you credit where it’s due, but also make a fair and efficient effort to help you develop the best story you can put forward.

 

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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February 2017 THRILLER Stories, Screenplays, and Short Films

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ACTORSHORT STORY – POST MORTEM REBELLION
February 2017 Reading
Written by Jax Lemon

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – OBEDIENCE
February 2017 Reading
Written by Michael Potts
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – HYPOTHERMIA
February 2017 Reading
Written by Jax Lemon

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – HEIDI
February 2017 Reading
Written by Keith Makenas
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – BEDLAM ON THE RAILS
February 2017 Reading
Written by Wayne E. Johnson

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – LATE NIGHT
February 2017 Reading
Written by Deepa Dharmaraj
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – EKKO
February 2017 Reading
Written by Johnny Walker

ACTORFAN FICTION Screenplay – POPEYE “SPINACH RUN”
February 2017 Reading
Written by Neil Chase
ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – ECHOES OF BONNIEVILLE
February 2017 Reading
Written by Simon Schneider


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festival posterMARAUDER, 13min, Canada, Action/Fantasy
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festival posterTRUE COPY, 11min, Russia, Thriller/Sci-Fi
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festival posterLAST BASE, 15min, Norway, Action/Thriller
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festival posterAPPRAISAL, 8min, UK, Thriller
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festival posterWEEKEND OF HEROES, 15min, Italy, Action/Crime
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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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THRILLER BEST SCENE Screenplay Reading – BEDLAM ON THE RAILS by Wayne E Johnson

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Winning Screenplay – BEDLAM ON THE RAILS
Written by Wayne E. Johnson

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Geoff Mays
LUMAN – Philip Krusto
DUKE – Casey Estey
PORTER – John Lester Phillips

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

Two armed, down-on-their-luck young hoods, a speeding streamliner, and a bad idea result in railway pandemonium not seen since the days of Butch Cassidy.

Get to know the writer:

What is your best scene screenplay about?

Bedlam on the Rails is the true story of the last two moving train robbers in America. In 1949, Luman Ramsdell, 23, and Duke Ashton, 20, made a snap decision to rob the B&O Ambassador, the streamliner taking them to Ohio from Florida.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

True story, true crime

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It is a unique, historical event. When asked, the average person and even historians will say that the last moving train robbery was performed by Butch Cassidy’s gang. Bedlam has two main characters that, even though they are on the wrong side of the law, the audience can relate to them. I would set the tone of this film somewhere between Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid and Bonnie and Clyde.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Bad idea

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Kelly’s Heroes

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About a year ago I was contacted by Wilson Casey, the author of the book Bedlam on the West Virginia Rails, interested in the possibility of turning his book into a movie. I read his book and finished a draft in a couple of weeks. After sending it to a few producers, and making revisions, this final version was completed in November of 2016. I’d say I’ve worked on it for nine months.

How many stories have you written?

My novel, The Militarized Zone: What Did You Do in the Army, Grandpa? was published in November. Ive had eight or nine short stories published in print and online. In 2015, one of my screenplays won an award from Writer’s Digest. Others have been runners-up, semifinalists and quarter finalists in various screenwriting contests.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

As I read the book, it seemed like a natural for the screen. It was an interesting story with colorful characters, and, for a true story, a good plot and resolution.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Along with his own research, author Wilson Casey interviewed Luman Ramsdell over a period of about three years and wrote his story in Luman’s words, which were great for the book. But in many instances the dialogue in conversations had to be modified to be acceptable for a screenplay. I’d say dialogue was the biggest challenge, since the events are written as they actually happened.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m a member of a veteran’s group and help our older vets when we go on field trips. We’re bringing the Moving Vietnam Wall to our area later this year. I volunteer in art classes at our local elementary school and I donate to animal protection charities.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

You were open and willing to look at my material and your feedback was invaluable. I always wonder if my scripts hit the right points and by what you indicated in the feedback, I succeeded and I’m on the right track.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

January 2017 THRILLER Stories, Screenplays, and Short Films

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FEATURE Screenplay – INCURABLE
January 2017 Reading
Written by Jeff York

BEST Scene – KIDICIDE
January 2017 Reading
Written by Kelly Karam
BEST Scene – THE UNCONQUERABLE
January 2017 Reading
Written by Jonathan Fear

ACTORBEST Scene – THE ROSY HUE OF THE DYING DAY
January 2017 Reading
Written by Lauren Hoekstra
ACTOR1st SCENE Script – INT. CAR – NIGHT
January 2017 Reading
Written by Martin Keady

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – COMES AROUND
January 2017 Reading
Written by Gunnar Halldorsson
ACTORSHORT Story – MURDER IS A BREEZE
January 2017 Reading
Written by M Maureen Skahan

ACTORSHORT Story – MARIONETTE
January 2017 Reading
Written by Melissa R. Mendelson
ACTORSHORT Story – SHADOWS
January 2017 Reading
Written by Kelly J. Kratz

ACTORNOVEL Reading – DEADLY SERIOUS
January 2017 Reading
Written by A.J. Thibault

 

 

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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2016 CORRUPTION Stories

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ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – CAPITAL PARTNERS
December 2016 Reading
Written by Libby Hellman

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – WHEN THERE WAS TIME
June 2016 Reading
Written by James Gillard, Kevin McGruder

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – CIVILIAN
June 2016 Reading
Written by Gina Scanlon

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – INKED IN BLOOD
June 2016 Reading
Written by Paul Corricelli

ACTORNovel Transcript – WHO KILLED HONOR BRIGHT?
February 2016 Reading
Written by Patricia Hughes

ACTORChapter 2 Reading – LARGE IS THE SMALLEST WE GOT
January 2016 Reading
Written by Jed Hamilton

ACTOR1st Ch. Novel Transcript – WATER FOR BLOOD
May 2016 Reading
Written by Brett Bacon

Thriller Film Festival – Thursday February 23rd. 7pm. Downtown Toronto

The FEEDBACK Monthly Film Festival is back for 2017.. Our home is The Carlton Cinemas, located in the heart of downtown Toronto at 20 Carlton Street. The event runs from 7pm to 9:10pm.

Continuing to showcase the best of short films from around the world, while maintaining our audience feedback format moderated by Matthew Toffolo. Showcasing a festival twice a month in 2017 starting in February!

Tickets for 2017 are PAY WHAT YOU LIKE. Purchase your tickets online via Paypal or Credit Card. Tickets are first come first serve.

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You will be able to buy alcohol (beer, wine, liquor), popcorn, candy, and refreshments before the show.

Here is the full program of films. Festival starts at 7pm sharp!

FIRST ACT PROGRAM


MIDNIGHT SIGNS, 4min, Italy, Thriller/Animation
Directed by Marino Guarnieri

In a small room overlooking the Bay of Naples, a young designer, suspended in time and in the night, faces the eternal struggle of the artist who tries to tame its instruments in order to use them as an extension of himself to express their imagination.

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THE TRAITOR, 5min, Czech Republic, Action/Thriller
Directed by Oldrich Antos

A young mafia member called the Turkish has a secret relationship with Lenka, an informant of this criminal group. The Turkish and Lenka plan to escape abroad. Their escape plans are accelerated by the information that Lenka became uncomfortable for the boss and he and his men are on their way to her apartment to kill her.

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MARAUDER, 13min, Canada, Action/Fantasy
Directed by Brendon Rathbone

After the Marauder’s Motorcycle is Stolen, they go on a search to hunt down the bandits that stole it.

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TRUE COPY, 11min, Russia, Thriller/Sci-Fi
Directed by Olga Belova

Igor’s uncontrolled transformations into other people force him to turn to the only person able to stop this…

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SECOND ACT PROGRAM


LAST BASE, 15min, Norway, Action/Thriller
Directed by Aslak Danbolt

Joachim is retiring from base-jumping to become a father for the first time, but first he goes on one last adventure with his best-friend Oyvind. When a storm approaches their friendship is put to the test; Oyvind want’s to turn back, but Joachim will apparently stop at nothing to pull off his very last jump.

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APPRAISAL, 8min, UK, Thriller
Directed by James Peaty

A corporate hitman returns home for his long overdue company appraisal…but the question soon arises: who’s appraising who?

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WEEKEND OF HEROES, 15min, Italy, Action/Crime
Directed by Francesco Bovino

Once a month, a bunch of dirty cops has a guys’ Weekend in an isolated manor in the countryside. Usually they divide their monthly loot, they play cards and they drink too much. But this time there is a betrayer among them.

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THRILLER BEST SCENE Reading – THE UNCONQUERABLE by Jonathan Fear

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Best Scene from the screenplay THE UNCONQUERABLE Screenplay
Written by Jonathan Fear

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
ATTICUS – David Straus
PROBUS – Charles Gordon
VICTOR – Nick Wicht

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

A hapless recruit must choose between death or dishonour when a Roman General tricks him into swearing an inviolate oath to murder two officers.


What is your screenplay about?

The Unconquerable glimpses into a dark, corrupt and cut-throat world of the Roman Empire seen through the eyes of Victor Ligustus, who loses his family to the Vesuvius eruption of 79AD and goes on to forge a career in the Roman army, honing his skills as a warrior and making some tough moral choices that teach harsh lessons about loyalty.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Action Thriller

How would you describe this script in two words?

Darkly compelling

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I believe the compelling storyline, moral dilemma and hard action set in a stirring historical context in “The Unconquerable” will appeal to a very wide audience.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Godfather

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Nearly 2years

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

To see if I could write a story others would find interesting

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Forcing myself to focus on completing the storyline rather than continually revising one section.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Military history

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

It involved feedback. All feedback is welcome and is frequently helpful, as in this case

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Be prepared to revise your work and even shift direction from your original idea but never, ever, give up on a dream.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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