Winning THRILLER Feature Screenplay: THE TWIN WITHIN by Gunnar E Garrett Jr

Genre: Thriller, Horror, Drama

The murder-suicide that left a thirteen-year-old girl without a mother and father triggers voices within encouraging her to kill.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Julian Ford
Amy: Penelope Corrin
Kevin: Dan Cristofori
Morgan/Heather: Rachel Salsberg
Madison: Emily Weir
Matt: Steve Rizzo

 Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

This screen play is about a dysfunctional couple who adopts a deeply disturbed set of twin girls who’ve witnessed their mother murdered by their father, and then turning the gun on himself. Now untrusting of anyone, one twin will do anything to protect them both from harm, including ridding their life of anyone she considers a threat.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

This is a Thriller/Suspense, that also leans into the Horror Category.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Like The Sixth Sense and Fight Club, this screenplay gives the audience to feel as they’ve figured out the film, they know where its headed and what’s going to happen, until… Oh no! They were wrong. The fact that I’ve written this film in one location with no extras, and a small cast also allows it to be shot on a lower budget, but still at a high quality, giving the investors a larger ROI than most films. Not to mention it’s creepy as F@$& with a little humor sprinkled in.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Incredibly deceptive.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The movie i’ve seen the most times in my life has to be The Slammin’ Salmon, with Hot Rod coming in a close second.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve been working on this screenplay for about nine months, and have done a couple rewrites since this reading, tightening the script for better production values.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written seven screenplays to date, one is currently in production, Riley’s Rainbow, and The Weak Outdoors, is currently in Pre-Production.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Somewhere Over the Rainbow by Isreal Kamakwiwo’ole

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The largest obstacle in this screenplay was to hide the fact that there was only one girl, and the her twin sister was just a mental disorder… A genetic disposition passed down by her father. Since this table read, we’ve done another two rewrites, better adjusting for this, though once we bring in a Director, we expect him or her to add input resulting in , I’m sure at least one more rewrite.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Outside of writing, my other real passion is spending time with my children, watching them grow and learn through hard work and effort in whatever it is they are involved in.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I entered the festival because, like every screenplay, rewrites are necessary, and without reputable feedback, the rewrites are useless. As far as the feedback I received for my work, even though no one is ever excited to her where they could have done better, it was all correct, and those adjustments needed to be made to take a film from being considered good, to great.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

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THRILLER BEST SCENE Reading – THE UNCONQUERABLE by Jonathan Fear

Watch the January 2017 Winning THRILLER Screenplay.

Best Scene from the screenplay THE UNCONQUERABLE Screenplay
Written by Jonathan Fear

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
ATTICUS – David Straus
PROBUS – Charles Gordon
VICTOR – Nick Wicht

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

A hapless recruit must choose between death or dishonour when a Roman General tricks him into swearing an inviolate oath to murder two officers.


What is your screenplay about?

The Unconquerable glimpses into a dark, corrupt and cut-throat world of the Roman Empire seen through the eyes of Victor Ligustus, who loses his family to the Vesuvius eruption of 79AD and goes on to forge a career in the Roman army, honing his skills as a warrior and making some tough moral choices that teach harsh lessons about loyalty.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Action Thriller

How would you describe this script in two words?

Darkly compelling

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I believe the compelling storyline, moral dilemma and hard action set in a stirring historical context in “The Unconquerable” will appeal to a very wide audience.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Godfather

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Nearly 2years

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

To see if I could write a story others would find interesting

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Forcing myself to focus on completing the storyline rather than continually revising one section.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Military history

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

It involved feedback. All feedback is welcome and is frequently helpful, as in this case

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Be prepared to revise your work and even shift direction from your original idea but never, ever, give up on a dream.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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2016 BEST SCENE Screenplays

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ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – THE WORK OF ZOMBIES
December 2016 Reading
Written by Patricia Semler
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – UNGODLY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Bill Osinski
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – CELLULAR MEMORY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Jesse Prevost
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – UP FROM THE DEPTHS: THE RISE OF MEGALODON
December 2016 Reading
Written by William F. Molnar
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – WHO KILLED HONOR BRIGHT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Patricia Hughes
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – ESCAPE FROM PLAIN MIDDLE
December 2016 Reading
Written by Carolyn Reese
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – DEATH OF A LADIES MAN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Salim Allybokus
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – CAPITAL PARTNERS
December 2016 Reading
Written by Libby Hellman
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – SHADOW
December 2016 Reading

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – SALACIOUS
December 2016 Reading
Written by Matthew Chura
ACTORTV PILOT BEST Scene Screenplay – ARMS OF MORPHEUS
November 2016 Reading
Written by John Christopher Thomas
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – ELAN VITAL
July 2016 Reading
Written by Maroun Rached

ACTORBest Scene Screenplay – IX
June 2016 Reading
Written by Eric Irizarry

ACTORBest Scene Screenplay – MATSQUI MASSACRE
April 2016 Reading
Written by Mark Curtis Dunn & Pamela C. Royal

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

2016 1st SCENE Screenplays

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ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MALICIOUS INTENT
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Briock
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – 20/20: SEARCH FOR INDEPENDENCE
November 2016 Reading
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – GOD’S LITTLE GAG
November 2016 Reading

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: NIGHT WIND TO BAHIA
October 2016 Reading
Written by Thomas Thorpe

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CRIME CYCLE
October 2016 Reading
Written by Donald R. Brown

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay: CHASING THE WIND
September 2016 Reading
Written by Corean Strong

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – NINE SCARS
July 2016 Reading
Written by Kelly Crawford

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – EXISTENTIAL QUANDARY
June 2016 Reading
Written by Brandon Maline
ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – WHEN THERE WAS TIME
June 2016 Reading
Written by James Gillard, Kevin McGruder

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – PUPPETS
May 2016 Reading
Written by James Griffiths

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – MONSTER BENEATH THE ICE
April 2016 Reading
Written by Jerry Kokich

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – BEFORE GOD
March 2016 Reading
Written by Stuart Wright

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – THE SHOT
February 2016 Reading
Written by Michael DeMattia

ACTOR1st Scene Screenplay – ROAD TO TEXAS
February 2016 Reading
Written by Emanuel Ruggeri

ACTOR1st Scene -GUNNISON
January 2016 Reading
Written by Daniel Duane

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

2016 Feature Screenplays

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ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – FIEND
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jeff York

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – INKED IN BLOOD
June 2016 Reading
Written by Paul Corricelli
ACTORFeature Screenplay – THE BOO
May 2016 Reading
Written by Scott McEntire

ACTORFeature Screenplay – MOTHS TO FLAME
March 2016 Reading
Written by Fredric Maffei

ACTORFeature Screenplay – CRIME EXTRAORDINAIRE
January 2016 Reading
Written by Howard Fridkin

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

2016 Short Screenplays

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ACTORSHORT Screenplay – BLOOD DRIVE
December 2016 Reading
Written by Myka J. Friscia
ACTORSHORT Screenplay – HANGING OUT IN MALAYSIA
December 2016 Reading
Written by Wolfgang Schuler
ACTORSHORT Screenplay – VERONICA
December 2016 Reading
Written by Craig Griffiths
ACTORSHORT Screenplay – SAY YOU’RE SORRY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Despina Moraitou
ACTORSHORT Screenplay – CURIOUS BUDDIES
December 2016 Reading
Written by Janet Caulfied
ACTORSHORT Screenplay – COLLAPSE
December 2016 Reading
ACTORSHORT Screenplay – PRIME SUSPECT
October 2016 Reading
Written by Adam Dwyer

ACTORLONG SHORT Screenplay – THE SON, THE FATHER
October 2016 Reading
Written by Lukas Hass

ACTORLONG SHORT Screenplay – CUCKOLD PICASSO
October 2016 Reading
Written by James R. Adams II and Lance Larson

ACTORLONG SHORT Screenplay – NOTE TO SELF
October 2016 Reading
Written by Humayun Mirza

ACTORLONG SHORT Screenplay – TOGETHER
October 2016 Reading
Written by Jade Syed-Bokhari

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – IF I DIE
September 2016 Reading
Written by Jean Nicole Rivers

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – SOMETHING UNDER THE BED
August 2016 Reading
Written by Scott Pittock

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – DESPERATE CROSSING
August 2016 Reading
Written by Thomas Thorpe

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – RED DOT
August 2016 Reading
Written by Mark Richards

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – MATCHSTICK
August 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Fardy

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – MATERNAL FEAR
July 2016 Reading
Written by Stephen Milek

ACTORShort Screenplay – FIFTY FIVE SECONDS
May 2016 Reading
Written by Kwasi Mensah

ACTORShort Screenplay – TURN ON DESIRE
February 2016 Reading
Written by Lauren Hoekstra

ACTORShort Screenplay – FOR HOPE
February 2016 Reading
Written by Cindy Lee

ACTORShort Screenplay – THE NEW NEIGHBORS
January 2016 Reading
Written by Filippo Santaniello

ACTORShort Screenplay – US NAVY CINE-KODAK
January 2016 Reading
Written by Stephen M. Hunt

 

 

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Feature Horror Thriller Screenplay: THE BOO, by Scott McEntire

Watch the May 2016 Winning Feature Screenplay.

Watch THE BOO, by Scott McEntire

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Suspense, Horror, Drama

Synopsis: Ronnie is a small-town sheriff in the South who still talks to his dead wife on a daily basis. His estranged sister-in-law, Brooke, is dealing with the sudden loss of her husband while still trying to conquer the mental demons of her past. Healing an old family rift becomes all the more difficult when those demons turn out to not merely be figments of her imagination.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Kaufmann
BROOKE – Kelci Stephenson
RONNIE – Zack Amzallag
OLIVIA/ANGELA – Jennifer Ferris
LUCIEN – Moui Nene
RAYLAND – Sean Ballantyne

Get to know writer Scott McEntire:

1. What is your screenplay about?

“The Boo” is a Southern gothic thriller about a small-town, widowed sheriff who unexpectedly bonds with his estranged sister-in-law, now faced with having to overcome the sudden death of her American Marine husband, and their external struggle with The Boo Hag, who according to Gullah tradition in the SE United States, is the cousin of the vampire who steals the skin of a woman while she sleeps to find a way to attack men.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

“The Boo” bridges the horror film genre to the Southern gothic thriller genre. Both genres have been terribly successful through too many horror films to name, and with Southern gothic stories like Mud, Slingblade, Smokey and the Bandit, etc. The budget for this movie would not have to be large, staying true to its horror film roots. And this is a story that has not yet been told. Originality is in short supply in today’s market, and this is worth the reach.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Mystical estrangement.

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Snatch

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Three and a half years.

6. How many stories have you written?

Half a dozen. Two are actual feature films now (“Anyone” and “With You”). The short films I’ve written are “TwinkleTown”, “Rent Party”, “Simple”, “Avarice”, and “Eye For An Eye”.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

This was a story pitched by a friend of mine, Brittany Sparkles, who knew the idea of The BooHag from a recent trip to South Carolina. This was during a 48-Hour film competition, and while her idea was passed over, she and I talked a lot that weekend so I could understand the story. From there, we altered it from a strict horror story to a multi-level Southern gothic thriller-horror film that strays into the world of the supernatural. Ultimately, I didn’t want to let a friend down who blessed me with this story to put into script form.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

An ex-girlfriend to didn’t understand why I was spending so much time with my friend, Brittany. Ha! The obstacle for this story primarily time. In the beginning, I was frequently researching about The Boo Hag. Then it was finding time to track my outline before finally putting pen to paper and writing the actual script. Going over it tooth and nail over multiple versions, then having friends come in to read for me, then making adjustment based on what I was hearing, before finally saying it is “good enough” and put it into competition!

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My kids, my beautiful girlfriend, filmmaking as a whole, acting, golf, and the happiness of the most rambunctious rescue dog for which I could have asked!

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Not only do you get to hear/see your words comes to life by persons you don’t know, but it happening outside of where you can offer any direction, too. It’s up to the script! The videos of script reads and film screenings make the Thriller Festival one of a kind. The initial feedback I received led me to scout through my script with new eyes. Sure enough, every tip they have was a glaring weakness that needed fixing. I was more than happy to fix it!

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Time spent planning early is probably three times less than fixing a screw up after you’ve completed it. Create your outline. Write as much story as you can (trigger phrases, trigger words, certain emotions that must happen), but not necessarily any dialogue. Story leads to plot, which leads to characters. Characters lead to interactions, which then lead to dialogue. Grow. Always grow.

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Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson