Winning THRILLER Feature Screenplay: THE TWIN WITHIN by Gunnar E Garrett Jr

Genre: Thriller, Horror, Drama

The murder-suicide that left a thirteen-year-old girl without a mother and father triggers voices within encouraging her to kill.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Julian Ford
Amy: Penelope Corrin
Kevin: Dan Cristofori
Morgan/Heather: Rachel Salsberg
Madison: Emily Weir
Matt: Steve Rizzo

 Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

This screen play is about a dysfunctional couple who adopts a deeply disturbed set of twin girls who’ve witnessed their mother murdered by their father, and then turning the gun on himself. Now untrusting of anyone, one twin will do anything to protect them both from harm, including ridding their life of anyone she considers a threat.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

This is a Thriller/Suspense, that also leans into the Horror Category.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Like The Sixth Sense and Fight Club, this screenplay gives the audience to feel as they’ve figured out the film, they know where its headed and what’s going to happen, until… Oh no! They were wrong. The fact that I’ve written this film in one location with no extras, and a small cast also allows it to be shot on a lower budget, but still at a high quality, giving the investors a larger ROI than most films. Not to mention it’s creepy as F@$& with a little humor sprinkled in.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Incredibly deceptive.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The movie i’ve seen the most times in my life has to be The Slammin’ Salmon, with Hot Rod coming in a close second.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve been working on this screenplay for about nine months, and have done a couple rewrites since this reading, tightening the script for better production values.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written seven screenplays to date, one is currently in production, Riley’s Rainbow, and The Weak Outdoors, is currently in Pre-Production.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Somewhere Over the Rainbow by Isreal Kamakwiwo’ole

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The largest obstacle in this screenplay was to hide the fact that there was only one girl, and the her twin sister was just a mental disorder… A genetic disposition passed down by her father. Since this table read, we’ve done another two rewrites, better adjusting for this, though once we bring in a Director, we expect him or her to add input resulting in , I’m sure at least one more rewrite.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Outside of writing, my other real passion is spending time with my children, watching them grow and learn through hard work and effort in whatever it is they are involved in.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I entered the festival because, like every screenplay, rewrites are necessary, and without reputable feedback, the rewrites are useless. As far as the feedback I received for my work, even though no one is ever excited to her where they could have done better, it was all correct, and those adjustments needed to be made to take a film from being considered good, to great.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

2017 BETRAYAL Stories, Novels, Films, Screenplays (January-June)

Watch the best of creative works showcased in this genre at the festival in the first half of 2017.


festival posterWEEKEND OF HEROES, 15min, Italy, Action/Crime
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festival posterTHE TRAITOR, 5min, Czech Republic, Action/Thriller
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FEATURE Screenplay – INCURABLE
January 2017 Reading
Written by Jeff York

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Festival Moderators: Amanda Lomonaco, Kierston Drier, Matthew Toffolo

Camera Operators: Mary Cox, Marko Cvijetinovic

June 2017 THRILLER Stories, Screenplays, and Short Films

Submit your Thriller/Suspense Screenplay to the Festival: https://thrillersuspensefestival.com/

 

ACTORSHORT Story – THERE ARE NO LIGHTS IN NAPLES
June 2017 Reading
by Dennis L. Havlin

ACTORSHORT Story – ALWAYS WATCHING
June 2017 Reading
by Kordale Gibson
ACTORSHORT Story – BEFORE AND AFTER
June 2017 Reading
by S. Pfeiffer

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – CONTINENTALIS
June 2017 Reading
by Aurele Ndja
ACTORTHRILLER BEST Scene Screenplay – SQUID JIGGERS
June 2017 Reading
by Judi Blaze

ACTORFANTASY SHORT Screenplay – NOTHING IS FREE
June 2017 Reading
by Terry Milner & Rebecca Brillhart

festival posterCRADLE, 11min, USA, Sci-Fi/Thriller
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festival posterBLURRY, 5min, USA, Thriller/Mystery
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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

THRILLER Best Scene Reading of SQUID JIGGERS by Judi Blaze

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Drama, Romance

Just when Monique is sure love is behind her, Trevor rearranges her world; a world complicated by Toad’s impending parole from prison. Monique’s life becomes a chaotic mixture of love with Trevor and growing anxiety over Toad. Even as her relationship with Trevor blooms, she is haunted by the stalker in the shadows, the man who perversely twists their past relationship to coerce her into taking him back.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Monique: Konstantina Mantelos
Bartender: Jack Comerford
Toad: Jordy Kieto

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

THRILLER Best Scene Reading of TASTE MY REVENGE by Dimitri Devyatkin

Winning Screenplay – TASTE MY REVENGE
Written by Dimitri Devyatkin

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julian Ford
ARCHITECT – Mandip Brar
PHARAOH – Zane O’Connor
TARAS – Sean Ballantyne
FARIDA – Kayla Lakhani

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Fantasy

In the ancient city of Thebes, the Pharaoh orders his Architect to design a new Treasury. Given no choice, the Architect agrees to the deadly assignment, although he knows the Pharaoh will have him killed after it is finished.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

“Taste My Revenge” tells one of the oldest stories in the world. Based on Herodotus’ “The Histories” from about 440 BC, considered the founding work of history in Western literature, it is the story of Pharaoh Rhamsinitus or Ramses III and his legendary Treasury. The action takes place in 1186 BC in Thebes, Ancient Egypt. The Architect who builds the Treasury knows he will be killed after it is completed, a common precaution to keep any secrets from being shared. But this Architect Horemb plans his revenge on the Pharaoh even though it would come after his own death. However, the long term ramifications of the Architect’s revenge result an even more cruel fate.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

The screenplay is a psychological thriller, a period piece (based in Ancient Egypt), combined with action, romance and mystery.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

One of the world’s greatest stories, it will reverberate with modern audiences. Audiences will thrill to the exotic locations, ancient Egyptian mystery and culture, and find many threads that are as current as a modern thriller.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Crime pays.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Modern Times (Charlie Chaplin), Night at the Opera (Marx Brothers)

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Story since childhood, screenplay for 1 year

How many stories have you written?

30+

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Red House (Jimi Hendrix)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

none

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

History, politics, international cultures, emotions, art, nature, music, love.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Glad to offer my film as a thriller. The feedback is super helpful.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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THRILLER Best Scene Reading of FOUR IN THE DOOR by Alan Barkley and Linda Barkley

Winning Screenplay – FOUR IN THE DOOR
Written by Alan Barkley and Linda Barkley

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Julian Ford
KAREN – Amanda Quach
FRAN – Kayla Lakhani

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Thriller

A former model, haunted by the secret of her parents’ shooting deaths, fights to succeed as a first responder in her late father’s police department against hostile and suspicious superiors while trying to stop a relentless cop killer. (The Brave One, Courage Under Fire.)

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

A woman with a dark secret in her past needs to redeem herself and her family name by proving her ability as a police officer against strong opposition and personal danger.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller and Action

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I feel the theme is engaging and the action exciting to watch

How would you describe this script in two words?

Determination and Redemption

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

“In The Line of Fire.”

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Two years. It’s been developed from an award-winning short.(Vail Film Festival)

How many stories have you written?

Five feature screenplays and twenty short screenplays

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

“Hey Jude”

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time- full-time job-

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Being with my wife.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The festival’s topic fit the bill and I received very thorough, professional feedback

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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THRILLER Best Scene Reading of THE ALIBI, by Wendy Appelbaum

Winning Screenplay – THE ALIBI
Written by Wendy Appelbaum

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
RON – Peter Nelson
PHIL – Rob Notman
MAN – Michael Pearson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A struggling screenwriter offers to serve as an alibi for a scandalized Hollywood producer in exchange for the development of his screenplay into a feature film.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

A struggling screenwriter offers to serve as an alibi for a scandalized Hollywood producer in exchange for the development of his screenplay into a feature film.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Thriller

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Though the concept of a struggling writer compromising themselves to reach their dreams has certainly been brought to life by far more experienced (and better) screenwriters than myself, I think the main character’s reasons for struggle are relatable. I also believe that the antagonist (with the right actor) would make for a compelling character to watch.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Desperation and Salvation.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

GoodFellas

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

6 months to a year (multiple revisions)

How many stories have you written?

3 screenplays, currently working on a fourth.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Too many to count but Rockin’ in the Free World by Neil Young.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Challenges in creating a compelling main character that the audience would root for, while clearly communicating his evolution throughout the story.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Songwriting, Guitar

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Though I have received constructive feedback on this screenplay from professional readers and competitions, the opportunity to receive feedback from a performance will further help to improve the screenplay and my skills as a writer. I thought the feedback I received was encouraging and spot-in with the areas that have to be improved upon.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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