Winning THRILLER Feature Screenplay – NEMESIS, by Carl Joglar

Winning Screenplay – NEMESIS
Written by Carl Joglar

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
STROUD – Cassandra Guthrie
BURNHAM – Dan Cristofori
MONTERO – Jane Hailes

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

A car wreck allows a fugitive recovery agent’s prisoner to escape into the woods where she’s forced to pursue the killer, but when the other driver finds her in the wilderness, the hunt becomes complicated and the agent begins to suspect the woman’s involvement was not by chance.

 Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

NEMESIS is about a fugitive recovery agent who, after being disgraced and fired from the U.S. Marshals, attempts to cover legal fees in a custody battle for her son by cashing in on the capture of an elusive killer. Unfortunately, she gets into a car wreck, her prisoner escapes into a vast wilderness and she’s forced to hunt him down again. But (without giving too much away), when the driver of the other vehicle finds her in the woods, the situation becomes increasingly complicated because of some hidden agendas.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

I’d say it could fall under drama, thriller and action because there are elements of all three, but if I had to categorize it, I would call it a dramatic thriller.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Just thinking about this, it occurs to me that no answer could sound very humble. I do feel very strongly about its merits, but even moreso after I started receiving so much positive feedback. People would say, “Wow, this is insane”, which I take as a compliment because you want to shake people up. I think the fact that three characters that are so different from each other are basically trapped in this environment together makes for a really curious situation. I feel like people might say, “I’ve got to see what happens when you put THESE three together.” But more than that, the main character’s journey is heart-breaking and relatable. I tried to make the ultimate example out of her. The moral of the story is “Don’t let your situation change who you are”. And who hasn’t been tempted at least once to step over that line?

How would you describe this script in two words?

“Intense” and “fast-paced”. As a writer, I have an unhealthy yet productive fear of being boring, so in a story, I’m obsessed with something either always happening or about to happen.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Jaws. It’s so amazing on so many levels. Story, acting, editing, etc. But Neil Simon’s The Goodbye Girl is a close second. That main character is the most charmingly hilarious train wreck I’ve ever seen. Great stuff.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve worked longer on this script than I have on my marriage. I’m kidding. I actually wrote the first draft in less than a month, but of course, I’ve been making changes ever since, so it’s going on six months now and one draft kind of melds into the next, so who knows how many.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been doing this since 1996 so I’ve lost count. If I included short scripts and commissioned scripts, the number would be ridiculous, but as far as strictly original speculative full-length screenplays.. probably 24 that I can remember. Oh! And a book. I wrote a contemporary sci-fi YA novel called THE PERILS OF QUAD. Right now I’m trying to find a home for it at a traditional publishing house.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Wow, that’s tough. I don’t know if this is good or bad, but ever since I was little, there’s been something about Earth, Wind and Fire’s “Fantasy”. I love it to this day and I really have no clue why. Maybe it was playing in the background the first time a girl kissed me or something. ..Right now, though, I’m addicted to Disturbed’s cover of Simon & Garfunkel’s The Sound of Silence.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Writers are going to hate me for this: There were no obstacles. There never are. I’ve never had writer’s block. If I did, I never realized it. I mean, I always get nervous when I start but once I’m off and running, that’s it. The pages start to pile up. Obviously, they don’t come out perfectly but they always come out.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My wife and child, of course. They’re my world. But the weird answer to that would be Vintage Marvel comic books. I’m not a collector, by any means. I just love the look, the feel, the simplicity, even the smell of a dog-eared silver age Marvel Comic. I guess because it brings me back to the days when my biggest problem in the world was deciding between Apple Jacks and Fruit Loops. Man, if life could always be like that. Good times.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I have to credit my best friend and producer, Alex Torres for that. He found out about the festival and immediately entered the screenplay. He’s the best. When I first read the feedback I received, I was pleasantly shocked because it was immediately apparent that this was a festival run by experienced and competent professionals and they clearly took the proper time to analyze the material. As a writer, you really deeply appreciate when people like this give you credit where it’s due, but also make a fair and efficient effort to help you develop the best story you can put forward.

 

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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2016 Feature Screenplays

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ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – FIEND
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jeff York

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – INKED IN BLOOD
June 2016 Reading
Written by Paul Corricelli
ACTORFeature Screenplay – THE BOO
May 2016 Reading
Written by Scott McEntire

ACTORFeature Screenplay – MOTHS TO FLAME
March 2016 Reading
Written by Fredric Maffei

ACTORFeature Screenplay – CRIME EXTRAORDINAIRE
January 2016 Reading
Written by Howard Fridkin

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Read the best of 2016 THRILLER/SUSPENSE Feature Film Loglines – Part 3

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CLICK the links and read the best of THRILLER/SUSPENSE Feature Film Loglines for 2016.

BEDLAM ON THE RAILS, by Wayne Johnson

FIEND, by Andrew Samuelsen

BED OF LIES, by Lani Aisida

PRIVATE DUDDELS, by Thobias Dhaeyere

MODERN PERSECUTION, by Jennifer Cole

THE DELIVERY, by Jayson Amoroso

DEVIL’S ISLAND, by Matthew Riehl

AXPLAR, by Jelena Janjic

CLARION, by PR Mitchell

THORNE, by Sean Williams

OPPRESSED, by Jeff Thompson

ROBOTOPIA, by Chad Bowman

SET FOR LIFE, by Jason Rist

LACUNA, by Steve Walters

A BOY AND HIS SOLDIER, by Spencer Guerrero

BLOODSPITE, by Fleurette M. Van Gulden

SURVIVING DESTINY, by Doris Lee

LUMP SUM, by Messan Amlon

PRESUMPTION OF GUILT, by Alisha Williams

THE LITTLE GIRL, by Heidi Thatcher-Nalley

August 2016 Thriller/Suspense Films/Screenplays/Stories

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ACTORSHORT Story – CELIA’S NIGHT OUT
August 2016 Reading
Written by Agata Zema

ACTORCHAPTER 1 Novel – OBITER DICTA
August 2016 Reading
Written by Lucian M.

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – RED DOT
August 2016 Reading
Written by Mark Richards

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – MATCHSTICK
August 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Fardy

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – DESPERATE CROSSING
August 2016 Reading
Written by Thomas Thorpe

ACTORSHORT Story – A DANGEROUS OCCUPATION
August 2016 Reading
Written by Randall Krzak

ACTORSHORT Story – COLORED TIES
August 2016 Reading
Written by Oz Greek

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – SOMETHING UNDER THE BED
August 2016 Reading
Written by Scott Pittock

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – SURVEILLANCE
August 2016 Reading
Written by Chris Gebhardt & Jenn Russi


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KADDISH!, 6min, France

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DRAWN TO FEAR, 7min, USA

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JAILBREAK, 1min., USA, Animation/Crime

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

 

 

 

July 2016 Thriller/Suspense Films/Screenplays/Stories

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ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – FIEND
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jeff York

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – NINE SCARS
July 2016 Reading
Written by Kelly Crawford

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – MATERNAL FEAR
July 2016 Reading
Written by Stephen Milek

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – ELAN VITAL
July 2016 Reading
Written by Maroun Rached

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Feature Horror Thriller Screenplay: THE BOO, by Scott McEntire

Watch the May 2016 Winning Feature Screenplay.

Watch THE BOO, by Scott McEntire

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Suspense, Horror, Drama

Synopsis: Ronnie is a small-town sheriff in the South who still talks to his dead wife on a daily basis. His estranged sister-in-law, Brooke, is dealing with the sudden loss of her husband while still trying to conquer the mental demons of her past. Healing an old family rift becomes all the more difficult when those demons turn out to not merely be figments of her imagination.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Kaufmann
BROOKE – Kelci Stephenson
RONNIE – Zack Amzallag
OLIVIA/ANGELA – Jennifer Ferris
LUCIEN – Moui Nene
RAYLAND – Sean Ballantyne

Get to know writer Scott McEntire:

1. What is your screenplay about?

“The Boo” is a Southern gothic thriller about a small-town, widowed sheriff who unexpectedly bonds with his estranged sister-in-law, now faced with having to overcome the sudden death of her American Marine husband, and their external struggle with The Boo Hag, who according to Gullah tradition in the SE United States, is the cousin of the vampire who steals the skin of a woman while she sleeps to find a way to attack men.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

“The Boo” bridges the horror film genre to the Southern gothic thriller genre. Both genres have been terribly successful through too many horror films to name, and with Southern gothic stories like Mud, Slingblade, Smokey and the Bandit, etc. The budget for this movie would not have to be large, staying true to its horror film roots. And this is a story that has not yet been told. Originality is in short supply in today’s market, and this is worth the reach.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Mystical estrangement.

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Snatch

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Three and a half years.

6. How many stories have you written?

Half a dozen. Two are actual feature films now (“Anyone” and “With You”). The short films I’ve written are “TwinkleTown”, “Rent Party”, “Simple”, “Avarice”, and “Eye For An Eye”.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

This was a story pitched by a friend of mine, Brittany Sparkles, who knew the idea of The BooHag from a recent trip to South Carolina. This was during a 48-Hour film competition, and while her idea was passed over, she and I talked a lot that weekend so I could understand the story. From there, we altered it from a strict horror story to a multi-level Southern gothic thriller-horror film that strays into the world of the supernatural. Ultimately, I didn’t want to let a friend down who blessed me with this story to put into script form.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

An ex-girlfriend to didn’t understand why I was spending so much time with my friend, Brittany. Ha! The obstacle for this story primarily time. In the beginning, I was frequently researching about The Boo Hag. Then it was finding time to track my outline before finally putting pen to paper and writing the actual script. Going over it tooth and nail over multiple versions, then having friends come in to read for me, then making adjustment based on what I was hearing, before finally saying it is “good enough” and put it into competition!

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My kids, my beautiful girlfriend, filmmaking as a whole, acting, golf, and the happiness of the most rambunctious rescue dog for which I could have asked!

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Not only do you get to hear/see your words comes to life by persons you don’t know, but it happening outside of where you can offer any direction, too. It’s up to the script! The videos of script reads and film screenings make the Thriller Festival one of a kind. The initial feedback I received led me to scout through my script with new eyes. Sure enough, every tip they have was a glaring weakness that needed fixing. I was more than happy to fix it!

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Time spent planning early is probably three times less than fixing a screw up after you’ve completed it. Create your outline. Write as much story as you can (trigger phrases, trigger words, certain emotions that must happen), but not necessarily any dialogue. Story leads to plot, which leads to characters. Characters lead to interactions, which then lead to dialogue. Grow. Always grow.

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Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

 

 

Watch March 2016 Winning Thriller Feature Screenplay Table Reading

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March 2016 Winning Feature Screenplay.

Watch MOTHS TO FLAME Feature Screenplay by Fredric Maffei:

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Fran Townend
NICK – John Marcucci
HENRY – Jonathan Robbins
SYLVIA/BARBIE – Annie MacKay
BUNNY – Nikita Ivy Boston

 

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson