Winning THRILLER Feature Screenplay – NEMESIS, by Carl Joglar

Winning Screenplay – NEMESIS
Written by Carl Joglar

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
STROUD – Cassandra Guthrie
BURNHAM – Dan Cristofori
MONTERO – Jane Hailes

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

A car wreck allows a fugitive recovery agent’s prisoner to escape into the woods where she’s forced to pursue the killer, but when the other driver finds her in the wilderness, the hunt becomes complicated and the agent begins to suspect the woman’s involvement was not by chance.

 Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

NEMESIS is about a fugitive recovery agent who, after being disgraced and fired from the U.S. Marshals, attempts to cover legal fees in a custody battle for her son by cashing in on the capture of an elusive killer. Unfortunately, she gets into a car wreck, her prisoner escapes into a vast wilderness and she’s forced to hunt him down again. But (without giving too much away), when the driver of the other vehicle finds her in the woods, the situation becomes increasingly complicated because of some hidden agendas.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

I’d say it could fall under drama, thriller and action because there are elements of all three, but if I had to categorize it, I would call it a dramatic thriller.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Just thinking about this, it occurs to me that no answer could sound very humble. I do feel very strongly about its merits, but even moreso after I started receiving so much positive feedback. People would say, “Wow, this is insane”, which I take as a compliment because you want to shake people up. I think the fact that three characters that are so different from each other are basically trapped in this environment together makes for a really curious situation. I feel like people might say, “I’ve got to see what happens when you put THESE three together.” But more than that, the main character’s journey is heart-breaking and relatable. I tried to make the ultimate example out of her. The moral of the story is “Don’t let your situation change who you are”. And who hasn’t been tempted at least once to step over that line?

How would you describe this script in two words?

“Intense” and “fast-paced”. As a writer, I have an unhealthy yet productive fear of being boring, so in a story, I’m obsessed with something either always happening or about to happen.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Jaws. It’s so amazing on so many levels. Story, acting, editing, etc. But Neil Simon’s The Goodbye Girl is a close second. That main character is the most charmingly hilarious train wreck I’ve ever seen. Great stuff.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve worked longer on this script than I have on my marriage. I’m kidding. I actually wrote the first draft in less than a month, but of course, I’ve been making changes ever since, so it’s going on six months now and one draft kind of melds into the next, so who knows how many.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve been doing this since 1996 so I’ve lost count. If I included short scripts and commissioned scripts, the number would be ridiculous, but as far as strictly original speculative full-length screenplays.. probably 24 that I can remember. Oh! And a book. I wrote a contemporary sci-fi YA novel called THE PERILS OF QUAD. Right now I’m trying to find a home for it at a traditional publishing house.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Wow, that’s tough. I don’t know if this is good or bad, but ever since I was little, there’s been something about Earth, Wind and Fire’s “Fantasy”. I love it to this day and I really have no clue why. Maybe it was playing in the background the first time a girl kissed me or something. ..Right now, though, I’m addicted to Disturbed’s cover of Simon & Garfunkel’s The Sound of Silence.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Writers are going to hate me for this: There were no obstacles. There never are. I’ve never had writer’s block. If I did, I never realized it. I mean, I always get nervous when I start but once I’m off and running, that’s it. The pages start to pile up. Obviously, they don’t come out perfectly but they always come out.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My wife and child, of course. They’re my world. But the weird answer to that would be Vintage Marvel comic books. I’m not a collector, by any means. I just love the look, the feel, the simplicity, even the smell of a dog-eared silver age Marvel Comic. I guess because it brings me back to the days when my biggest problem in the world was deciding between Apple Jacks and Fruit Loops. Man, if life could always be like that. Good times.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I have to credit my best friend and producer, Alex Torres for that. He found out about the festival and immediately entered the screenplay. He’s the best. When I first read the feedback I received, I was pleasantly shocked because it was immediately apparent that this was a festival run by experienced and competent professionals and they clearly took the proper time to analyze the material. As a writer, you really deeply appreciate when people like this give you credit where it’s due, but also make a fair and efficient effort to help you develop the best story you can put forward.

 

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Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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THRILLER BEST SCENE Reading – THE UNCONQUERABLE by Jonathan Fear

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Best Scene from the screenplay THE UNCONQUERABLE Screenplay
Written by Jonathan Fear

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
ATTICUS – David Straus
PROBUS – Charles Gordon
VICTOR – Nick Wicht

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Thriller, Crime, Action

A hapless recruit must choose between death or dishonour when a Roman General tricks him into swearing an inviolate oath to murder two officers.


What is your screenplay about?

The Unconquerable glimpses into a dark, corrupt and cut-throat world of the Roman Empire seen through the eyes of Victor Ligustus, who loses his family to the Vesuvius eruption of 79AD and goes on to forge a career in the Roman army, honing his skills as a warrior and making some tough moral choices that teach harsh lessons about loyalty.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Action Thriller

How would you describe this script in two words?

Darkly compelling

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I believe the compelling storyline, moral dilemma and hard action set in a stirring historical context in “The Unconquerable” will appeal to a very wide audience.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Godfather

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Nearly 2years

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

To see if I could write a story others would find interesting

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Forcing myself to focus on completing the storyline rather than continually revising one section.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Military history

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

It involved feedback. All feedback is welcome and is frequently helpful, as in this case

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Be prepared to revise your work and even shift direction from your original idea but never, ever, give up on a dream.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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Watch Winning Thriller Best Scene Reading from ELAN VITAL Screenplay by Maroun Rached

Best Scene from ELAN VITAL Screenplay
Written by Maroun Rached
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SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Fantasy, Crime, Thriller, Sci-Fi

Synopsis: The world in the 2050’s is split into democratic regimes and Elohite theocracies, states run by the clergy of a new extremist faith. Elohite specially trained agents infiltrate the US and commit terrorist attacks using paranormal powers. A team of local paranormals is recruited to stop them.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
NATHAN – Dan Cristofori
AIDEN – Mark Boutros
FRANK – David Occhipinti
BILL – Michael Gaty

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Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

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Watch Thriller Feature Screenplay Reading of THE DEVIL’S LARCENY

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THE DEVIL’S LARCENY, Feature Script Reading, by Howard Fridkin

SYNOPSIS:

NOTE: There is a TWIST in the end of this script. So pay attention!

The story is about two young law students, Steven & Katie, engaged to be married, who are researching the crimes of a dead pedophiliac serial killer for an important law assignment. As they begin delving into the killer’s psyche and the lives of his deceased victims, they begin noticing certain character traits resembling their own and eventually realize the horror that he is the reincarnation of the killer and she is the reincarnation of his last female victim.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
KATIE – Kirsten Nolan
STEVEN – John Goodrich
PROF. ROTHBINE – Gabriel Dumas
DR. BURMAN – Roman Spera
SARAH – Stephanie Schmid
JUNE – Ida Jagaric
DET. DESMOND – David Schaap

Get to know writer Howard Fridkin:

1. What is your FEATURE SCRIPT about?

Elements of the scenario have to be curtailed to prevent spoilers and the setup of a twist ending. The story is about two young law students, Steven & Katie, engaged to be married, who are researching the crimes of a dead pedophiliac serial killer for an important law assignment. As they begin delving into the killer’s psyche and the lives of his deceased victims, they begin noticing certain character traits resembling their own and eventually realize the horror that he is the reincarnation of the killer and she is the reincarnation of his last female victim. Katie, in order to survive Steven’s pursuing obsession to kill her, must plan to murder him first — but who’s going to believe her ludicrous story?

2. Why should your script be made into a film?

This is a highly unique psychological thriller which has never been executed in this type of fashion before. The credible blend of suspense and supernatural events (a la: “Psycho” meets “The Exorcist”) will throw the audience into a new realm of terror and thoroughly surprise them with its complex, yet all accountable twist ending. This makes for a low budget, high concept spec script with enough audience appeal for a commercial success.

3. How long have you been writing?

Since the 70s, but as a hobby and always for fun. I began taking writing seriously in the 90s and have since been aspiring to earn recognition.

4. What movie have you seen the most in your life?

The Good, The Bad And The Ugly (it’s a religion with me).

5. What artists would you love to work with?

Clint Eastwood

6. How many stories/screenplays have you written?

Eight.

7. Ideally, where would you like to be in 5 years?

Love to be earning a living by doing what I love: writing and, eventually, direct.

8. Describe your process; do you have a set routine, method for writing?

I try to write every day, even it if isn’t the main story I am working on. I may watch a film or listen to music that puts me into a certain mood for a story. Depending on the subject matter I’m writing about, I watch specific films to inspire me but then I make sure I go the extra 100 miles to create a new formula for that respective genre.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m an incurable movie addict by nature and have been since I saw my first episode of the original TV show “The Outer Limits” at age 4. I’m also a fervent memorabilia and classic toy collector and have been declared by Joe Clokey (son of “Gumby” creator Art Clokey) “the biggest Gumby collector in the world.”

10. What influenced you to enter the WILDsound Script Contest?

I truly believe that a table read is the next best thing in seeing my script on the big screen — so I entered my new thriller “The Devil’s Larceny.”

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

I hate to use cliches, but when one really works, you have to go with it. Winston Churchill said “Success is not final, failure is not fatal: it is the courage to continue that counts.” And getting professional feedback on your screenplay doesn’t hurt either.