Winning THRILLER Short Screenplay – THE SON, THE FATHER by Lukas Hassel

Watch the October 2016 Winning Short Screenplay.

Written by Lukas Hass


Genre: Crime, Thriller, Horror

A ten year old’s birthday surprise has unexpected consequences far into his future.


NARRATOR – Hugh Ritchie
LUKE – Benjamin Camenzuli
FATHER – Paul Whitaker
MOTHER – Becky Shrimpton
SUSAN – Jane Smythe
GUARD – Percy Alexander Harris

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Theeatically, I explore the notion that the road to Hell is paved with good intentions.

– A young boy’s birthday sets in motion a series of events that will have dark consequences far into his adulthood.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Suspense, thriller, horror.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It is a fresh take on an old problem. A film with a strong drive and point of view.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Surprising. Horrific.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?


How long have you been working on this screenplay?

From conception to finished project, about a year.

How many stories have you written?

5-6 feature screenplays, and 2 short screenplays (one of which was made into a successful sci fi short film, “Into the Dark”, winning many awards and screening in over 70 film festivals world wide.)

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

A bizarre personal story a friend told me over a coffee about his childhood. I took it and ran with that idea.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?


Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m an actor (Blacklist, Blue Bloods, Limitless, The Black Room etc.- and a filmmaker ( I’m also passionate about injustice of any kind which is kind of a red thread through all my writing.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Don’t write unless you have something to say. Figure out what makes you furious, what gets you fired up, and write to that.


Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting: Sean Ballantyne

Editing: John Johnson

Watch HANNIBAL TV Spec Screenplay Reading

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HANNIBAL “Honesuki”, TV Script Reading
Written by Ibba Armancas
Read 10 Questions with the writer


Hannibal Lecter’s attempts to leave the country are thwarted when Jack Crawford pulls him into a politically charged case that leaves children robbed of their hands, tongues, and eyes. Meanwhile, successfully framed for Lecter’s murders, Will Graham negotiates how much of himself he’s willing to compromise in order to get back at the man that destroyed his life.


NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton
WILL GRAHAM – John Tokatlidis
JACK CRAWFORD – Donovan Hardy
MASON VERGER – Tyson Vines
ALANA BLOOM – Kassandra Santos
BLANCHE – Amanda Mona Weise
BEVERLY – Denise Yuen



Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Watch RABBIT’S MAN, Thriller/Suspense 1st Chapter Novel Reading

DEADLINE July 31st: 1st CHAPTER/FULL NOVEL Festival. FULL FEEDBACK. Get novel performed by professional actors

Watch RABBIT’S MAN, 1st Chapter Novel Reading by Philip Oyok

STORY Read By – Becky Shrimpton


A novel about a Nigerian real-estate businessman and former vigilante gun-smuggler who becomes blackmailed by a British spy to supply weapons to a militant army called the United Niger-Delta Brigade, or risk exposure of his past deeds.

The contest appeared ideal for me to showcase my work, and the fact that it’s being read by a group of professionals was enlightening to know that my work wouldn’t be judged by just the opinions of a single reader who may or may not find my story totally convincing.
– Philip Oyok

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And we’ll make it into a MOVIE

Watch Winning Thriller Feature Screenplay Reading of FLEET WEEK: EVANESCENCE

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Watch Feature Screenplay: FLEET WEEK: EVANESCENCE
by David Redstone


A Navy ex-SEAL goes independently active to rescue his kidnapped niece from the ghostly world of undersea ‘Neathers’.

Watch Interview with David Redstone:


NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton
TOM GILMORE – Julian Ford
DEREK GARNET – Andy Bridge
RAY KELVIN – Aaron Rothermund
VARIOUS PEOPLE – Frances Townend

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Watch Thriller Feature Screenplay Reading of SHOOTING STAR

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WATCH – SHOOTING STAR, Feature Script Reading by Richard Harrison:


When the love of your life has the keys to your heart and the keys to your money, it’s hard to kill her!


NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton
KELLY – Andrew Farr
QUAID – Dan Cristofori
CASSIDY – Shailene Garnett
CRAWLEY – Lucas James
VARIOUS ROLES – Anjelica Alejandro

Get to know writer Richard Harrison:

1. What is your FEATURE SCRIPT about?

Shooting’ Star’ is a ‘rock n roll’ road movie, a story of love and revenge. A beautiful, young female grifter, realises the the guy she’s in love with is more committed to their lifestyle than her, and in desperation steals the only thing he has of value that could be her chance of security ( the key to a safe deposit box) and leaves him. We start the film three after this event with her ex-boyfriend, Kelly, hunting her down across New Mexico for the key. The obvious motive is ‘money’ but its really about ‘love’ and recapturing that one moment you had in you life with someone you love.

2. Why should your script be made into a film?

This script should definitely be made into a movie because its an hour and forty minutes of pure escapism! Its got heart, its got desire, it will make you cry and it will make you laugh. It makes you lose yourself for that moment in time, which is what a great film is about.

3. How long have you been writing screenplays?

If I am honest, about fifteen or sixteen years. Its been a long, long road, and its very hard to get recognised. So, to be selected as one of your winners is a great compliment. As a very experienced Editor, friend of mine said, “filmmaking is not a science. There’s no exact way. There’s no definition, no precise formula”.

4. What movie have you seen the most in your life?

That’s easy, The Big Lebowski, followed by Some Like it Hot and then Casablanca. I remember dragging both my kid brothers to see The Big Lebowski when they were about fourteen and thirteen years old, there were seven of us in the cinema at the most. When they came out they said they had never seen a movie like it. It must have been some four or five years later when it started to catch on, and and over the last fifteen years we have watched with a sense of irony, joy and wonder at how its caught on and got recognised. If you re-watch certain scenes, there are more and more jokes in there than most people recognise and more than most films, literally dozens of them. Its a masterpiece! But having said that, what’s the screenplay of Casablanca? Eighty pages max on the paper, no fat on the bone there and possibly the most perfect script ever written, “Where were you at 3 O’clock this morning?” “That’s so long ago I can’t remember”. That’s a line and they come at you every minute. Watch it again!!

5. What artists would you love to work with?

Its certainly changed. For most of the 90’s its been the same as most people , Tarantino, Rodriguez, and then gradually I graduated to Alexander Payne, who is a true, true filmmaker of the highest order. But most recently David O’Russell. Those three films over the last few years have been incredible. To go from ‘The Fighter’ to ‘Silver Linings Playbook’ to ‘American’ Hustle’ in today’s climate is not only incredible bravado, it really is a true artist that can entertain an audience with three films that are essentially all character driven, its rare, its a hark back to the old greats such as Billy Wilder and Alexander Mckendrick. On an acting front, they blow in the wind, which isn’t their fault, its mainly down the films. But Christian Bale has prevailed, Ryan Gosling never disappoints, but I think there’s more exciting women actors out there than ever before, dozens of them with so much to give, and I am not talking the young babes, look at Robin Wright, Gillian Anderson on stage here in the UK, Helen Mirren, Meryl Streep still knocks them dead and if she got her act together, Sharon Stone could knock them all out the park……women actors are a power to be unleashed in the cinema and I think their time is coming!

6. How many stories/screenplays have you written?

‘Shooting Star’ is my fourth feature length screenplay and I wrote, directed and produced one, award winning, short film, ‘Sweet Thing’. My third feature film script, ‘THE HONEY KILLER’, I wrote, produced, and directed on a shoestring budget and won three international film festivals, and I had it called ‘a cult movie’ by Warner Bros, but I could never find a Distributor. I’ve seen it screened and succeed in over half a dozen countries at film festivals, but no international audience has ever seen it:, I would love to get it out there! Again, like ‘Shooting Star’, its essentially a road movie with a femme fatale as its lead.

7. Ideally, where would you like to be in 5 years?

That’s easy, Hollywood, and Directing my next movie, which is already written and ready to go.

8. Describe your process; do you have a set routine, method for writing?

Its a little unusual: I usually think of really outrageous and provocative scenes and scenarios. Then, when I have three or four really unusual scenes that excite me, I start thinking, ‘who is in them and what is their motive’. So, I invent set-pieces that really stand out, then invent my characters and storyline, so kind of back to front. Or the other way is I invent a really good opening scene, then think to myself, ‘where the hell would this go?’ And I find that really exciting as I don’t know where the script is going to go. I make it up as I go along and surprise myself til I get to the end. From that i surprise others.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

This will bore everyone reading this but mainly exercise; running, working out, cardiovascular, yoga, keeping fit. If I feel good exercising, I can generally achieve more creatively, but that’s just me! A bottle of brandy might work for others, but I have also written some of my best stuff sunk into a bottle of red wine….’hypocrite!’

10. What influenced you to enter the Thriller Script Contest?

I think what influenced me the most was the full appraisal of my what I had written. None of us know what we’ve written, we think we do but we don’t, no idea, we’re clueless. We’re just sunk in our own vision, and when I saw the full appraisal as part of the competition, I was sold. Then, I got my appraisal and it was possibly the best I have ever received, not because it was good or complimentary, but because they had obviously read it, and I mean completely and they properly criticised it! So their comments were not only ‘left of field’, but they were an accurate observation and they actually improved the script, not matter how hard they were to swallow. It was so worthwhile it was worth the price of entry just to get that feed back…..let alone winning, that was a real surprise. Winning didn’t even cross my mind, I needed to know’ what professional people thought of it. Me and the guy who I created the story with, Dave Powell, are over the moon.

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Yeah, of course! You haven’t nailed it, re-write, re-write and re-write it. Get advice and comments from others, disregard the ones you know are nonsense, assess the one’s that annoy you, react quickly to the ones that make sense! Only you know where this screenplay is going, but make it the best it can be, no matter what it takes, because at the end of the day you wrote it…..but the outside voices and comments could be the ones to make your day.

Watch CAGEY – Winning Short Screenplay Performance Reading

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Watch the Performance Reading of CAGEY by J.J. Hillard:


NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton

PACE – Rob Young

RESTIN – Rob Salerno

VOICE/BOSS – Mandy May Cheetham

Get to know writer J.J. Hillard:

1. What is your SHORT SCRIPT about?

Here’s the premise: Two drunk, angry men — one in his 20s, the other in his 30s, both in business suits — share an office space and an unstated but unusual assignment from their hated boss, a task which neither one wants to take on.

2. Why should your script be made into a film?

CAGEY is a short crime thriller that would be relatively inexpensive to produce, has strong characters, plenty of action, and offers enough plot twists and reveals to keep viewers entertained for at least 5 minutes on their cellphones or tablets. Plus, I’d get an IMDB page out of it!

3. How long have you been writing screenplays?

For about 8 years I’ve been learning the craft by reading many books and articles, taking online instruction (UCLA Extension with Emmy-nominated screenwriter Jessica Scott, a lengthy fellowship with Jeff Gordon’s Writers Boot Camp and recently, completing Hal Croasmun’s Screenwriting U ProSeries). I’ve attended film festivals and actively communicate via Twitter with other writers and filmmakers. And of course, I’ve watched WILDsound videos and listened to your podcasts!

4. What movie have you seen the most in your life?

Hard to say as I’ve not kept a tally. It would probably be among these dozen films: Adaptation, Alien, Avatar, Blade Runner, Body Heat, Casablanca, Contact, District 9, The Fifth Element, Romancing the Stone, Thelma & Louise and The Wizard of Oz. Yes, I have a strong predilection for science fiction and fantasy stories.

5. What artists would you love to work with?

Among producers and directors: Alfred Hitchcock, Akira Kurosawa, Robert Altman, David Lean, Nora Ephron and Stanley Kubrick — but that’s not going to happen, is it? You see boys and girls, that’s why you shouldn’t procrastinate. None of us is around forever! Among the living it would be: Kathyrn Bigelow, Neill Blomkamp, John Boorman, Alfonso Cuaran, Clint Eastwood, Gareth Edwards, Atom Egoyan, Megan Ellison, Ang Lee, David Lynch, Ridley Scott, Tarsem, and Robert Zemeckis. In terms of actors, Summer Glau, Nathan Fillion and Jake Gyllenhaal can call me anytime and we’ll talk screenplays tailored to their unique talents.

6. How many stories/screenplays have you written?

I’ve written/rewritten 6 shorts, from psychodramas to sci-fi, some of which placed in or won contests; 1 spec teleplay for The Big Bang Theory; and 3 spec feature screenplays: a sci-fi script about artificial intelligence, an interplanetary epic and an action-adventure set in a rainforest. I have a modern medicine horror story in mind for my next screenplay.

7. Ideally, where would you like to be in 5 years?

Working on my latest studio assignment, in close collaboration with the producer, the director and the actors, while rewriting another independent feature script in my spare time!

8. Describe your process; do you have a set routine, method for writing?

I’ve learned through my writing courses that outlining and structuring a screenplay is essential to make any type of progress finishing a first draft. I plan before I execute. I research and read up before I actually start to work on a script. Once I know the ending, I can begin. I love weekends, when I can dedicate large amounts of time to writing — and to procrastinating and being distracted, of course.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Biology, natural history, ecology and conservation, especially of tropical rainforests and coral reefs. I support and champion various Kickstarter and Indiegogo film projects — both narrative and documentary. I’m also an advocate of strong coffee, rich desserts and creative napping.

10. What influenced you to enter the WILDsound Script Contest?

More than once my writing has been the beneficiary of the feedback I’ve received from WILDsound readers, regardless if I reached the finals or won one of your contests. Besides, once I get into your website it’s hard to find my way out without signing up for something!

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Cultivate your ischial callosities. In other words, keep your seat in your seat and write. Create your own deadlines and rewards if that’s what it takes to get something written on a regular basis. And please, remove the earphones when you’re out and about. Eavesdrop on those around you. Listen. Be attentive. Observe people in all kinds of settings. Those are a writer’s prerogatives. There’s inspiration everywhere if you’re receptive. And most importantly, be in touch with your emotions, all of them. Don’t be afraid of strong feelings. After all, that’s what you want your readers and audiences to experience from your work.